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Whoa, this is great. I love the scene that Chris and Jill are having conversation about the BSAA retirement. Im getting more interested on this FanFic. Keep it up! Smile
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Great story. I'm very curious to see where this goes.
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Again, this is really good. Let me know you when you have the next chapter up. Very Happy
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PostSubject: Re: RE:ABYSS fan fiction   RE:ABYSS fan fiction - Page 2 EmptyWed Mar 28, 2012 9:18 pm

Wow!! I seriously need to start keeping up with these chapters from now on. That was a REALLY good read, Biohazard! Especially the 2nd part of chapter 2.

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Chris stayed in Africa for the following year after the Kijuju incident, helping restore balance to the infected regions alongside Sheva Alomar. Together they made sure all the B.O.Ws released in the area were neutralized. They also made sure that anybody connected to the Kijuju incident, like any of Excella Gionne´s accomplices within the powerful branches of Tricell, were captured, bringing them all to the ICC for justice.

Now, see.. This is much more realistic than riding off in the sunset in a helicopter. Capcom could've put something like this towards the end of RE5 instead of leaving it off the way they did. I really liked interaction between Chris and Jill. Once again, Chris still hasn't made no moves on Jill yet lol! D: But, when I read the part of where she was about to kiss him; I gasped, but then nothing happened. Thanks Chris. :<

Oh, and by the way thanks for sharing these. You seriously have a talent for writing. And I'm sorry for replying so late. Sad I don't think there's any grammar mistakes from what I saw, but my grammar is the worse haha soo... You should think about posting your story on websites like fanfiction.net in case you want to get your story out to more people. Keep on going! I hope you become a famous writer soon!


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That was great 00bio, looking forward to the rest of it, I like how the historical elements fit in the story, Smile
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Frederick Duvall seemed to enjoy travelling in style. Chris was escorted to the rundown building in London where he had to meet the EBCU team, in a beautiful, regal limosine. ´A bit pretentious, don´t you think Mr.Duvall?´, asked Chris, as he looked outside at the cloudy, rainy weather. ´The private security company I hired seem to think that this was an easy way to explain the need for security and justify the half a dozen cars following us from the airport. This operation is too damn risky to have some extremist catch a whiff of it and blow himself up in hopes of killing you, don´t you think Chris?´, said Mr. Duvall. ´Yeah, guess so´, replied Chris. ´Ah, here we are Chris. The old candybar factory. Don´t ask me why the team meets here, but its inconspicuous enough for you and the team to drive off towards the military base afterwards´. The car stopped in front of an abandoned building. The streets were empty save for some crack addicted youngsters who stared oddly at the armed guards escorting Chris and Duvall inside the building. ´Here we part ways Mr. Redfield. I will give you the rest of your indications via radio. Your team should be through the inside of the building. On the right side there is a garage. Just say hummingbird twice and knock three times. They´re expecting you.´ Chris nodded and headed towards the inside of the building.

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Chris said the passwords at the garage entrance and knocked the amount of times he was supposed to. After about two minutes of impatient waiting, the door opened. Chris walked inside the garage, and saw a group of people loading their weapons, talking amongst each other, with tense looks in their eyes. A woman had opened the door for him, beautiful, with captivating dark eyes and desirable ebony skin. ´I´m Ashley Norrington. I heard about an hour ago you were coming in to assess the team on this op. So gear up, we´re heading over to the airfield in less the 30 minutes´. The rest of the team looked at Chris and sneered. He was almost ceertain he heard a snort of laughter. How could Duvall tell them with only an hours anticipation? Chris looked around. Everyone was almost set. It was a dark room, the windows on the side of the untidy garage were covered by boxes, and the room was illuminated by a glow of hanging light bulbs. It was damp, and 3 cars were parked, which looked like they hadn´t been used in a while. Chris hesitated a little, then just looked up at the team. ´My name´s Chris Redfield. Now apparently by what Norrington told me, you have no clue as to who I am. Let me introduce myself. I´ll be your captain on this mission. So I need each of you to tell me your names. I´m gonna have to memorize them for this mission, and I rather it be sooner than later´. Ashley looked like she had been slapped in the face. Kenji and Marco who were already geared and loading their weapons, looked downright insulted. ´Redfield. The Redfield thats takin´ pills and takin´ vacations from babysittin´ the new bsaa trainees?Now dont ya be tellin me that your that Redfield´, said Tom, who had walked over to Chris, with a smirk on his face. ´I hope your not, that Redfield. Names Tom. Tom Smith.´He put his hand for a handshake. Chris responded, and was squeezed hard by Toms grip.


´Alright Redfield. My name is Kenji Takahiro, 5 year EBCU veteran and now, former captain of this team. I hope the pill thing is a nasty rumour, I really do´. Kenji´s eyes were fixated on Chris. This man saw him as an enemy. ´My name is Estrada, Marco Estrada. Didnt know there would be a new captain on this mission. I dont like it´. Evan McCormick walked up to Chris. And just smiled. ´This has got to be a joke, right? Duvall have some twisted sense of humour or something?´. Evan was literally in Chris´s face. ´Hey back off Evan´, said a burly bald man who was beside a car behind the rest of the team. Chris hadn´t seen him before. ´Oh what Jacob, you really think Duvall would send a has been to lead this op? the old man is uptight but even he´s not that dumb!´. ´I´m not gonna tolerate insubordination on this mission McCormick, there´s too much at stake, so get the funnies out of your system now, so we can get a move on´. Chris looked him dead in the eye. Chris could tell. This man had seen war, and he could take care of himself. Evan kept staring at him. ´Oh what you want to kiss him now? just back off man, we gotta get going´, said Jacob. ´Yeah J. And of course cap. You should gear up. I wanna see you out there in the field . See what your made of.´


He backed off and headed back towards the table where he was loading and preparing his weapons. The bald man approached Chris, and shook his hand. He was taller than Chris, with stern blue eyes, and a rugged look. ´My names Jacob Burton. I take it you were the former S.T.A.R.S member Duvall told me about´. ´Duvall told you about me?´, asked Chris, perplexed as to why he knew and the others didnt. Then he realized. Burton. ´I rarely talk to my dad. But he told me about you. I know you´ll do fine with the team, we´re not as bad as you´d think. Afterall, we all have to watch each other´s backs on this operation, no sense making bad blood here is there?´. Guess your right´. Chris put on his BSAA gear, his default operations uniform, with green tactical pouches and vest on his torso, and a white shirt folded up to the elbows with the BSAA emblem on the sides. ´Alright Duvall´s just informed me that we gotta be movin out right now to be on schedule, so finish up and move out people, we got a plane to catch!´ exclaimed Chris. He stood beside the exit, making sure everyone left the room equipped. He was deliberatley pushed by Kenji and Evan on their way out. Jacob touched his shoulder. ´It´ll be alright captain, let them have their bitch fits. Were going to need you down there´. Chris smiled. They were on their way out.

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LARGE, ISOLATED FOREST IN WALLACHIA, HUNGARY
16 HOURS UNTIL VIRUS RELEASE


The night was cold and solitary. The vast, green forest spread across the ground like an incessant ocean. The moon was hardly visible through the murky clouds, and the fierce wind seemed to howl aggresivley. Chris Redfield and his team sat inside UK military aircraft, waiting until they would reach the so anticipated destination. ´Tepes university isn´t far now, Captain´. We should be there in around twenty minutes´, said Ashley, as she flew the the air vessel. ´Good. Listen people, the plan was to originally arrive on Dracul road and head via foot to the castle. But I recieved a message from HQ two hours ago that indicated there were too many hostiles set loose in the forest. There are alot of B.O.Ws around this place, so its safer to drop from the sky and land in a camp established by the local branch of the BSAA. They´ll be waiting for us with weapons. Its not safe to go around this place with just a standard issue handgun. We all drop on the assigned spot. There we´ll head up Vér hill, where we´ll reach the castle´. Chris practically had to yell, since the noise inside the aircraft made it almost impossible to hear. ´We can take the action Redfield, Duvall knows that. It would´ve been easier to just head on foot. You over complicated everything, and that can compromise the operation!´, shouted Kenji, with an outraged look´. ´If you don´t have the balls for this Redfield, you shouldn´t be here!´, yelled McCormick.


´We´re taking the jump. Less risk of casualties, end of story. Now strap up and be ready to go!´, replied Chris, feigning indifference. Chris went to the front of the plane, over to the cockpit. ´How much longer Ashley?´. ´Norrington to you. And we are nearly there. Tell the pilots to come, I have to get ready for the jump´, said Ashley. Chris looked through the windshield. There he could see the quaint but disturbing castle with its sets of dark towers, like black arms reaching for the heavens. Chris headed to the back and told the pilots that were riding along to relieve Ashley from her flying duties. He joined the team once more. ´Alright, you each have flares, in the event any of us stray from where we´re supposed to land. You know the protocol. If you get separated you stay put until the rest of the squad finds you. When we reach the camp, we grab our remaining weapons and head out. Everyone clear?´. Nobody answered. ´Yes Captain sir.´ Jacob replied, causing the rest of the team to nod in agreement. Jacob gave Chris a nod of approval. ´Five minutes people!´. Chris saw what was probably the BSAA camp. There was fire and what he made out to be vehicles. Chris was nervous. His team wasn´t loyal to him, but only to each other, which meant he would have to be extra cautious when out there in the dark and unforgiving abyss that was the forest.


They spoke with each other. A way to calm their nerves of this impending dangerous operation. The fate of the world was in their hands. Chris saw distrust towards him in the eyes of some, admiration by one, others with loathing, but one had a deep and dark ambition in his eyes. They were cold. A trait Chris recognized all too well. He would have to win the trust of these people. It was the only way they were gonna stay alive. The only way they would head back to their families. because if there was something that Chris valued, it was life. And how much of it is lost in vain?. This team had to work with him. Because if they didn´t it would be the end of them all. He just looked at them. Tom saw Chris and noticed his vacant expression. ´You alright there Cap? not gonna get sick on us there, are ya?´. He laughed. And so did the team. It didn´t matter. Because now there was no time to care about such trivialities. They had reached the assigned jumping point. It was now or never. What Chris was there to do. ´Showtime´.

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i liked this second part,i would like to see a litle bit more
of horror trough,you are very talented so i think if the story and the enviroment got a litle bit darker,more horror and action it would be more intense and scary,
it would also be a good time to see new characters frow the series,like jill or even sheva

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There are new characters, like Ashley Norrington. I would like to see more horror and creepy things. But it's good, I should tell you, you are definitely a great writer.
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PostSubject: Re: RE:ABYSS fan fiction   RE:ABYSS fan fiction - Page 2 EmptyWed Apr 04, 2012 7:38 pm

I really like your original characters, it's like I can actually see them in a real RE game. I actually like the pacing of the plot. Jumping straight into the action and horror without build up will make it seem rushed. Also, do you think you can make up new B.O.W.s? That would be really awesome. You're doing really well with this story. Keep me posted on updates. Smile
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There are new characters, like Ashley Norrington. I would like to see more horror and creepy things. But it's good, I should tell you, you are definitely a great writer.

i know there are new characters,but it would be nice to see jill,barry e.t.c
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This was a great read again, thanks Bio. You are so talented. I usually don't like reading but loved to read this.
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CHAPTER 3

IN THE DARKNESS LIES YOUR FEAR...



´Cmon go, go, go!!!', shouted Chris. ´Remember head to the camp, we don´t move until everybody is at the rendevouz point!!! remember people we´re on a tight schedule!!´. First, Evan and Kenji took the leap. Then, Tom and Marco. Finally, Ashley and Jacob. ´Alright! tell HQ We´ve been deployed!!´, yelled Chris, over the loud and icey wind. The pilots confirmed with a thumbs up, and Chris and braced himself, and took the leap. The wind was cold and felt like it was cutting his face, the forest below was menacing and broguht memories from past missions. Especially that mission.... Chris was in the forest in Racoon city. He was searching with the S.T.A.R.S alpha team, for clues on the whereabuts of the missing Bravo team. Then he saw it. His comrade, Joseph...being eaten by those things....

Chris was falling hard and fast. He heard screams via the radio. He was going to die. He hadn´t deployed his shoot. And the sky seemed corrupted, with what looked like black smoke moving around, almost like a large, deadly swarm of flies. ´FUCK!!´. He deployed his shoot but he was too close to the ground. Chris closed his eyes and prayed for the best. Tree branches ruffled and cracked violently. All Chris saw was darkness. And all he felt was pain. He used all the will power he could to open his eyes. They barely did. Chris was apparently in the branches of a large ancient tree. It had saved his life. He couldn´t believe he had passed out during the jump. Chris was stuck, tangled in between the branches of the tree by his parachute. He felt weak. He was bruised all over. His eyes were heavy again. He made out a dark cloud of smoke approaching him as he dangled restlessly on the tree. He felt drowsy. He couldn´t see anymore. All he heard were screams on his radio....


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UNIDENTIFIED AREA OF THE WALLACHIAN FOREST
13 HOURS UNTIL VIRUS RELEASE.

Chris Redfield was in pain. His parachute must´ve not taken the strain and pressure of the old trees branches and given out. Chris analyzed his wounds. Minor cuts and bruises on his body, and a large, bloody gash on his forehead. This must´ve happened as he fell. But how long had he been unconscious? his watch had broken on the fall. The weather and the position of the stars and the moon seemed the same. No change whatsoever. But Chris had no idea how this could be. He had honed his survival skills to seek out the most intricate detail, and these things generally never evaded him. There was always someway to tell. But now there wasn´t. Perhaps it was his head, he did hurt it. Then he recalled. That black smoke.... It wasn´t in the sky when we jumped. How was it there when he was falling? and where did it go? these seemed like strange details, but in the moment they didn´t matter. Chris needed to know if his team was okay. He needed to find the rendevouz point as soon as possible. He checked his gear. All he had was the old radio, and a lighter. Even his combat knife must´ve gotten stuck in the trees. A forest full of B.O.Ws and he was disarmed. It wasn´t exactly reassuring, knowing he was bleeding and weakened. The forest looked grim and eerily vacant. Like not a thing was alive. No movement, save for the trees bothered to dance by the wind. And a black, sombre dancing at that.


There were no paths, no tracks made by an animal that may lead to some sort of river. Chris walked on. He heard the howling of the wind, and the crunch of his boots as they made his very cautious steps forward sound in the night. Even Chris´s flashlight was broken, he had to rely on the little flame of his lighter. The castle was to the south, and according to his instinct, so was the camp. Chris pressed on, and pulled out his radio. ´Hello, this is captain Redfield, report your status alpha team, I repeat, report your status´. Silence, save for the noise effect on the radio. The wind seemed to howl in mockery, as if some sinister being was watching and laughing at Chris´s Predicament. This frustrated him. He had been so careful. How did this happen?. Then Chris saw it. Smoke. Smoke in the distance. It was different than the one he had seen before. This smoke came from a small fire. It must be the BSAA camp. Well at least there´s something to focus my energies on, he thought. It was about an hour walk from where he was, more or less. He made his way through the tall trees, as they casted shadows over anything that was below them. The moon found no place or solace in the forest, as it was denied entrance by the leaves and branches of the rooted giants.


Chris felt something inside him he knew all too well. A feeling of isolation, a feeling of desperate panic, locked into one drowning sentiment of falling down a large chasm. His senses heightened. The forest was silent, almost serene, if only it weren´t for the cold winds and heavy tension in the air. As he hiked in between trees, Chris came upon an area where the moonlight seemed to have taken refuge. It was a round area where there were no trees, just a small pond, amd dead trunks of what were once all, proud trees. Chris needed to wash his wounds. As he approached the water, his radio let out a bonechilling, bloodcurling shriek. Chris was startled, but he immediatley reacted. ´ Hello? hello? is anybody there? this is Captain Redfield! please, tell me your current position! are you wih another team member? whats goin on!´. Chris just continued to hear shrieking. Just endless screams. whoever was on the other line was in pain, was suffering a great amount. It sounded like a woman. ´Ashley!! is that you? I repeat ashley, do you copy?!´. The radio went silent. Chris didn´t know what to think. He waited for a repy. Nothing. Chris stood there in the blank oasis of moonlight, just fixated on his radio. But nothing. He quickly headed over to the pond and washed his wounds. The water seemed to sooth his aching scratches, along with the medicinal green herb he rubbed on them.


He finished treating his most serious ones, especially the gush on the head, and he stood, now fearing the fate of Ashley. He was leaving the pond when suddendly,the radio activated again. ´Hello, this is Chris Redfield, is anybody out here? have you reached the rendevouz point?´. The noise got louder. Then, a voice started speaking through the noise, quietly. Chris pressed the radio to his ear. He held it with a tight grip. ´Hello?´, he asked. He heard something. Distorted mumbling. Then it got louder. But so did the noise. ´ Nemo pulsatus fontis of sanctus animus. ego intueor thee quod sentence vos ut condemnatium´. Chris heard loud sobbing. The distorted voice began cackling. It got louder. And louder. ´AHH!´, yelled chris, as the noise of the radio seemed to explode his eardrum. He threw the radio on the ground, and after five seconds, it shortcircuited and ceased o function. Chris looked at the small remains of the radio. His heart was pounding rapidly. He felt cold sweat on his face. ´I have to find the team´, he said outloud, as he walked out of the seemingly peaceful area. This forest was strande, foreign to him in an inexplicable way. As he left the area, his uncertainty and fear got the best of him. He did not look back.
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Chapter 3, This is really fantastic. You're really improving, keep it up! Smile
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Excellent! The only thing wrong with it are the spelling errors, but other than that...great story so far!
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[quote="Lady Yuna"]Wow!! I seriously need to start keeping up with these chapters from now on. That was a REALLY good read, Biohazard! Especially the 2nd part of chapter 2.

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Chris stayed in Africa for the following year after the Kijuju incident, helping restore balance to the infected regions alongside Sheva Alomar. Together they made sure all the B.O.Ws released in the area were neutralized. They also made sure that anybody connected to the Kijuju incident, like any of Excella Gionne´s accomplices within the powerful branches of Tricell, were captured, bringing them all to the ICC for justice.

Now, see.. This is much more realistic than riding off in the sunset in a helicopter. Capcom could've put something like this towards the end of RE5 instead of leaving it off the way they did. I really liked interaction between Chris and Jill. Once again, Chris still hasn't made no moves on Jill yet lol! D: But, when I read the part of where she was about to kiss him; I gasped, but then nothing happened. Thanks Chris. :<

Oh, and by the way thanks for sharing these. You seriously have a talent for writing. And I'm sorry for replying so late. Sad I don't think there's any grammar mistakes from what I saw, but my grammar is the worse haha soo... You should think about posting your story on websites like fanfiction.net in case you want to get your story out to more people. Keep on going! I hope you become a famous writer soon

this,and i liked chapter 3

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Wow that was one hell of a fall Chris took Shocked. I hope the other team members made it alright. I'm really loving how your using music in your story. Keep em' coming Wink
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Wow that was one hell of a fall Chris took Shocked. I hope the other team members made it alright. I'm really loving how your using music in your story. Keep em' coming Wink

lol i cant turn on the music,because it keeps me distracted
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PostSubject: Re: RE:ABYSS fan fiction   RE:ABYSS fan fiction - Page 2 EmptySun Apr 08, 2012 10:46 am

Great job Bio. You really managed to bring horror in the story. Great writing.
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PostSubject: Re: RE:ABYSS fan fiction   RE:ABYSS fan fiction - Page 2 EmptyMon Apr 09, 2012 4:45 pm

I am finally up to date with your FanFiction, you have nooo idea how much I loved it.

First of all, I LOVE THE MUSIC YOU CHOSE!! The first one, I played it whilst I was
reading and it fit so nicely. Even finished reading at the same time the music finished.
Do you know how awesome that was?!? The second one is even better, it reminded me a little bit of REmake music.

I really love this at the moment. The team is SUCH a bitch! I love the way you wrote them!
Glad one of them is nice to Chris. *SQUEALL*

Chapter 3 is really good so far, you got me feeling scared for Chris. You put him in the forever alone spot I swear hahaha. That made me feel sad for him :{

You are really good, keep it up as everyone says. You REALLY should submit this in Fanfiction.net. I'm not even kidding.

As I have noticed, you've proofread well, though there might be just a hint of stumbling letters, it was very neat overall.

Can't wait for the next update, for real.

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Chris didn´t like the cold. The night had become misty, and the dark clouds shrouded the once visible moon. He was still aching from his wounds, and had successfully walked about twenty minutes towards the smoke until realizing how much darker the forest had become. The visibility was lower and he still had no weapons and no official word from the team. Chris had to stop. It was dark and he had grown tired from hiking through the vast and unforgiving forest. He looked up. All was silent in the forest. The once defiant breeze had ceased. Chris saw ruffling in a nearby tree branch. It rapidly moved to another. Chris braced himself. Perhaps it was a BOW, or a trap set up by Hans Mikel. God knows his twisted mind could release even more things around this castle, he thought. Chris leaned against a nearby tree branch and stopped. He did not breath. He peeked over his shoulder. And there stood gazing, perched upon a small rock, a bird. A dark crow by the looks of it. The mist made the animal even harder to recognize, Chris mistaking it for a small mammal at first. But the silence was what had Chris unsettled. He was confident in his hand to hand combat abilities, even whilst injured, but, Why was the forest silent? the air felt heavy, butat the same time, it didn´t. Something was wrong.


Chris peeked from behind the tree and contemplated the small beast again. It stood still. It stared at Chris and would not move. He moved forward out from behind his cover. ´Shoo!´, he said silently, as he threw his arms up in a threatening gesture. There was no reaction from the bird. It still stood perched upon the small rock. Just leering at him. The patient but menacing creature seemed to analyze Chris, not taking its dark eyes of him. Chris just looked back. Its eyes seemed to change. Dark, then gold, then dark again. Then...white. Chris Redfield looked to the sky and saw that the moon slightly peered over the clouds. Perhaps this shifted the bird´s eye colour? He didn´t want to find out. He needed to move towards the camp and fast. He moved in the opposite direction of the bird and continued his journey. He walked and walked, passing towers of dark thick trees, tripping and hurting himself various times. The light he had to guide him was minimal after all.


Then he came to a shocking realization. Chris had spent another 20 minutes hiking through the forest, only to gaze upon a rock, a rock so familiar to him it made him curse his luck. The same rock where a bird was once perched. he had wasted time and energy, and the warm flame of his precious lighter for nothing. It was a dead end. Then Chris noticed something. Behind a large tree, close to where the familiar rock was, laid a bunch of clothes. Chris got closer and examined them. Among the items were a lab coat, a jacket, trousers, and a bra. They were dirty and torn beyond repair, except for the coat. But no signs of blood. No traces of tangible evidence that would suggest that whoever wore the clothing, was killed. He examined everything closer. Inside the labcoats main pocket was a notebook. It was crumpled and humid, but was still legible. Who had left this behind? Chris could hardly see anything in the darkness. He turned on his lighter and began to read.


November 3rd, 2012

We´ve been sent by a group of foreign businessmen to conduct a search in this forest. Me, Roger Maple, Kathleen, and Simon have been analyzing animal droppings and the soil here for weeks now. No one will tell me or any of us why. The apparent owner of the company just told us to shut up and do our jobs. He wrote us a big check so fine by me. We´ve come across some strange things, like a raise in the number of predators in the wildlife of this area. But I´m no hippie wildlife nut! I´m a real scientist, I study genetics! Well money talks, and the money these strange men are paying me is more than enough to fund my own investigations.

November 7th, 2012

Kathleen has told me on numerous occasions she doesn´t want to work at night anymore. Me and Simon just laugh. I mean, she´s a scientist and she´s afraid of the dark? please. But it has gotten a little strange around here. The men guarding us are all wearing gas masks and have fully automatic weapons, like they´re expecting something. And they make us work hours more then they did a few days ago. Still, I´m not complaining. I´m cashing my check and getting out of this hellhole at the end of this!

November 8th, 2012

We´ve discovered something. Strange chemicals in the air have been killing the forest´s plantlife, while the increase in predator´s in this place has killed off most of the small mamals that made their homes here. Have to wait for the lab results on the soil. Things have gotten more...tense. I´ve been the only one who has kept quiet in front of the guards, Simon got himself beaten by the brutes for demanding more hours of sleep. And Kathleen has been strange as of late, she doesn´t talk to us anymore. She just works. Oh well. At least she stopped whining.

November 11th, 2012

This is too much. We can only sleep for four hours and they feed us only twice a day. I tried to quit but I was beaten up by the captain of the squad. And Kathleen had a panic attack. Something about some bird, and how it wouldn´t stop chasing her. Crazy bitch. And Simon disappeared. I think he became too much of a niussance to the guards. Maybe they fired him. Something tells me they didn´t fire him at all though....

November 13th, 2012

We´ve made no other breakthroughs. I´ve tried coming up with new hypothesis´, just to keep them happy, but they just threw my research in my face. I´m begining to think we aren´t employees anymore, but prisoner´s. I want to get out of here soon. I feel like I´m being followed and watched. I drank a bit of water in a pond a while ago, and I keep hearing voices in my head. Maybe it had some sort of drug? and the bird, it won´t stop chasing me. I don´t want to end like Kathleen. The rest of the guards wouldn´t tell me anything, all I know is that she, alongside two guards disappeared last night while running some tests near the river. All I want is my money. This forest is giving me the creeps.

November 15th, 2012

God I didn´t know. Please, if my family ever finds this, I hope they know how much their daddy loved them. He did this for them. Here, in my last moments, I pray to the god I rejected all those years ago. Hell exists and it won´t stop tormenting me. I feel pain inside, I just want to end it. There´s some rocks near these trees. I will take the coward´s way out. Forgive me family, forgive me god, I´m finishing this. (there are stains of tears and blood. The entry ends abrubtley. There is something else in here...).


Chris found a small flashlight in the trenchcoat. He turned it on and began to ponder. So they were conducting experiments in these woods. But why? and who sent the researchers? all Chris knew was that something killed them, and apparently, the armed guards that were securing them as well. He stood up. He still couldn´t comprehend why he had ended up back at the same place. And he also noticed something else. The smoke he had been following in the distance was gone. But how? and how would he find the rest of the team? Chris continued to move, not stopping and moving quicker through the woods, due to the new visibility the flash light gave him. He had been counting the minutes, making sure he knew how much time had passed since the time he had awoken to the current moment. The moon was completely covered once more, and the mist seemed to intensify. Then he saw it. Atop a branch in a nearby tree, stood the bird, staring once more. Chris kept going. He couldn´t afford to waste time. He moved forward, advancing five more minutes through the dark forest, and stopped once more.


There it was, again, perched, just staring. He hadn´t even seen it move. Then, it happened again. The wind stopped blowing. Everything was silent. And Chris stood there, thinking of the best way to scare away the bird quietly while not making unnecessary noise. The bird opened its mouth. ´AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHH!!!´, the bird suddendly let out horrific human screams bringing Chris to the ground in pain. The abhorrent screams continued. Chris now heard macabre laughing. louder and louder. The unnerving noises disturbed him deeply, and flashes of the decapitated girl he failed to save flashed through his mind. He saw her. Dead on the ground, her head beside her lifeless body. Chris looked iinto her eyes. She looked back ´YOU DIDN´T SAVE ME FAILURE´, the dead face laughed at him, in a deep, disturbing masculine voice. Chris yelled once more. He stood up and rapidly ran from the bird. But there was nothing there. Chris was just a man alone, in a dark forest.


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PostSubject: Re: RE:ABYSS fan fiction   RE:ABYSS fan fiction - Page 2 EmptyWed Apr 11, 2012 11:48 pm

Myyy Nig Naggg. this omg this is the shizzz.

I just loove the fact that you put a Diary in there, it is so
Resident Evil. Adding a flashlight in too!

The bird and when its eyes changed colour, I got chillsss.

I am having endless chills like you wouldn't believe.

The last part was just so creeeppyy.

You are a favourite author of mine, quick updates? What else could a fan ask for?!

MOOOOAAARR
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PostSubject: Re: RE:ABYSS fan fiction   RE:ABYSS fan fiction - Page 2 EmptyThu Apr 12, 2012 8:15 pm

Wow I really liked how you depicted the bird. It reminded me of Edgar Allan Poe's ''The Raven''. That was also a nice touch of psychological mind-fuck there at the end. Keep up the awesome work 00. Very Happy
One more thing. " Something about some bird, and how it wouldn´t stop chasing her. Crazy bitch." This made me laugh a little.
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PostSubject: Re: RE:ABYSS fan fiction   RE:ABYSS fan fiction - Page 2 EmptyFri Apr 13, 2012 1:40 am

Of all the Chapters, this one is way too different. I mean, in a good way, it's very unique. Then again, it gives me chills. That stupid bird, lol. I am ready for the next one
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PostSubject: Re: RE:ABYSS fan fiction   RE:ABYSS fan fiction - Page 2 EmptyFri Apr 13, 2012 7:20 am

This is really good I love the diary entries. I also like how crows are being used as monsters other than just trying to peck people to death.
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